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3rd Nov 2007, 04:26 PM
[Hello guys, after I forgot my password on my other account I decided to start reading as a silent reader, and got the urge to write a Sim story with my newest sims...I got great rsults with their appearances. Sorry for the blurry-ness...I have no game card...But they all look beautiful ingame!
*I was the Author of Kremlin Dusk - JWarkWhore, and yes I am a woman :hat: so be kind to my story....<3?]
Welcome to Crystal Valley Heights! A fairly old community with it's own little quirks! The streets are clean, the school's are good. I know what you are thinking, 'That place couldn't exsist!'.
As you can see not many people live there as of now, they all seem to die...or leave because of the household drama. Some say Crystal Valley was the story of the most tragic love story ever thought up. But most people just turn their head's, especially the younger crowd.
Meet Rene(Goth)Benson! And her husband Spencer Benson. Rene is the soul heiress to the Goth throne. Her step sister Cassandra and stepbrother Alexander were in her way once Rene's mother had married Mortimeir. So some things happened and I'll leave the rest for you to wonder about. They have a child together, her name is Devyn Marie.
With her mother's beaming blue eye's and dark hair accompainied by her father's dark skin she will soon enough be a heartbreaker. Rene and Spencer promise Devyn the world, and even though she is so young her mother has announced her to be the Heiress. But little does Devyn Marie know is that mommie's little girl has some serious competition!
Mommie's pregnant again!
[Sorry guys' for the plumbob! ><;;; haha...Andthis story actually has pictures. :D]
3rd Nov 2007, 04:34 PM
good start so far
3rd Nov 2007, 04:34 PM
[Sorry it's so short..these are just introductions to the families of Crystal Valley. =]
* Thank you very much :D]
Meet Maxxine Mitchel a young beautiful fiery redhead, and her cute daughter Cassie Rei. While her husbands never home poor Maxxine has to take care of the house work, take care of the pride of joy Cassie, and keep up her social gossip. Although she shouldn't complain most people have it way worse than she has. While her nights are fairly tireing young Cassie just plays all day making work easier for her mother. Cassie is becoming quite a wonderfully clever girl, and learned to talk all on her own.
Above there is is getting up in the middle of the night because Raul sleeps all day and pays no attention to his own daughter. His own spitting image! Maxxine has been contemplating divorce for the past two years...Over half of their marriage he has ignored Maxxine's spousal needs, and ignored their bouncing baby girl. Max begins to wonder if there is any closure to this and figures out there is no way out until she met...
3rd Nov 2007, 04:54 PM
Meet the Song household...Sadly there as no happy ending nor begining for them. Rainy Anne was a sweet and simpleminded girl. She enjoyed playing with her son (age four) Vicktor, and spending time with her husband Ian Song. Although the curse of Crystal Valley Height's got ahold of them, she still remains happy for her sons sake. Her husband Ian left her with no house, no money, and barely legal rights to her own son. But the courts rectified that Rainy Anne was more fit to be a parent than Ian was. The sleezy lecher slept with anyone would would pull their pants down. Thus began their divorce. Rainy Anne has suspicions but they ere all thrown away...Until she got a call.
Devastated Rainy packed her thing's and Vicktor's toys and left. Living with her mother until the court issued she had full custody. Now living on her own again in a rundown home Rainy Anne doesn't seem interested in love...
But someone else is...
That's Kevin Mosley.He's a typical guy. Wear's cologne, whatever is clean, and has a messy rundown home like Rainy Anne. Unlike Rainy who had been lucky in love Kevin hasn't been so lucky. He get's the occasional girlfriend, and one night stands but he's looking for love...Not a bimbo. Kevin spends all day on WOW,[World of Warcraft], Drinking, and smoking. And all night he goes and works. Someone has to keep the lights on right?
And that's when Rene came into his life. After chatting online for quite sometime Kevin thought the name Rene Spencer sounded familair. Rene is one of the most famous storyteller's around the World. Especially the work of Fantasy Novel's and the occasonal horror story.
3rd Nov 2007, 06:47 PM
An erie cry crept throughout the Mitchel's home. Young Cassie had awakened once again, making Maxxine very distressed. Crawling out of bed her tassled red hair bounced from side to side as she jolted for her three year old's room. Opening the door she smiled in between a yawn.
"Cassie Rei! What're you doing silly?"
Spoke out her wary voice. cassie just giggled reaching up for her mother's sweet embrace. Suddenly Max's noise crinkled, and the most horrid scent came into her body. Oh god...I only feed you oatmeal. Thought Maxxine as she pulled young Cass to the changing table. As she removed the strench filled diaper and replaced it with fresh one she could hear her husband Raul just getting in. Placing Cassie down upon her pink carpeted floor, Maxxine crept out of the room shuting the door allowing her to play amongst her toys.
"Raul!!" yelped her shakey voice.
Looking upon her husband she saw he was on the phone. With someone who seemed fairly important...in his pants to him. Walking over with anger in her footsteps Max yanked the phone out of his hands and slammed it upon the receiver.
"Raul Mitchel! Who the hell do you think you are! You come and go as you please! Cassie Rei need's you! I need you, but you don't seem to care. these ae her most important years! She need's her father! Not a...a.." Maxxine stopped talking as tears rippled down her face. She could see her husband did not care about her, or their beloved daughter Cassie. She saw he jut grinned there like a clown while she spilled her heart out. She then ran to the master bedroom and locked Raul out forcing him to sleep on the couch.
3rd Nov 2007, 06:55 PM
This looks good. :) Seems like Raul needs to leave. Good update!
3rd Nov 2007, 06:57 PM
Thanks stormy =] I just wish I could fix the resolution =[
3rd Nov 2007, 07:13 PM
Early the next morning Maxxine got a call from her new friend Rene. She told her aout what happened last night and how bad Max's own feelings were harmed. Rene didn't approve of this and asked her how well she could provide for herself if Raul were to leave.
"Re--. Yes Rene, I know I do not have the best resume in the job area-- yes, yes Rene I am fine. Rene I have to go Cassie's calling for me..Rene...Re-...RENE. I will call you later sweetie alright? Okay, bye." she smiled with a short laugh as she hung up the phone. Grabing young Cassie she placed her in her high chair, placing a small food bowl on her small table and leaving her with a small kiss on the forehead.
Soon Raul awoke and sat at the table, he smiled sweetly at his little girl and patted her on the head. With a small bit of hype in his step he hugged Max from behind and squeezed her tightly. Blushing lightly Maxxie prepared some breakfast for Raul. Is this for real...Is this some sort of joke? She asked herself this over and over again. But as they shared breakfast it all seemed so normal. But as Raul left for work a surprise came to the door.
4th Nov 2007, 09:38 PM
[* Hey guys! Umm, I checked my resolution, lighting, shading, brightness, ect,ect....And I hope he pictures will become more decent....Also lots of updates tonight. :] Also I am doing a SMALL time skip. Raul is....no more :D Also here's a small preveiw picture of the new quallity. <3*]
[Also....Rainy Anne o-o]
4th Nov 2007, 10:39 PM
Your story seems to be doing pretty fine so far. There's nothing wrong with your writing and there's enough pics and text. Balance between them is good and I'm very glad to hear you'll now be able to improve the quality of the pics.
There's still some problems with the pictures tough. Maybe in a future chapters you would like to zoom a little closer so the reader can see the important part more clearly. In some pictures there was a lot of empty space. For example... when Maxxine got a call from her friend, I think it would have been better if you had zoomed the picture so we can see her expression more clearly.
It would be good to have some more variation between the pics too. Try to take them from different angles and from different distances. That will make your story more interesting and dynamic.
Other than that you're doing just fine :).
5th Nov 2007, 12:47 AM
I like it so far! Im curious to see how the story develops between the characters
5th Nov 2007, 02:34 AM
Yeah thanks. I'm trying but it's hard to actually make them look fantastic...I don't have photoshop...Nor could I even do that. D:
Thank's alot for your critique...I really do appreiciate it..Although I wish silent reader's would say something. :c
5th Nov 2007, 02:52 PM
[I am editing the pictures now...Just to make them more, easy on the eyes. =) ]
Well it's been nearly two years since that day at Maxxine's home when her sister Dawn Hugh came into the picture. Her sister had got offered a job in Crystal Valley as the chief editor at the most reknowned magazine 'Crystal Scene'. It attracted reader's from all over, young and old, short and tall. Dawn also offered Maxxin a job as a photographer and as her own personal assistant. Young Cassie Rei is now four year's old and will be starting kindergarden next year with the big kid's in the fall.
About nine month's ago dawn caught Raul with his secretary at his lawfirm. He was all over her, and by the time she got to Max, Raul was already out the door. So Dawn just kept it a secret from her sister. As of last week max finally got over him and started dating again. No winner's yet but shes trying really hard. In May after Raul left Maxxine moved in with her sister into a beautiful home in the sister. Now she lives next door to her best friend Rene Benson.
Over at the Song household Miss-I've-never-had-a-job-in-my-whole-life has a steady job now as a secretary for a famous lawfirm. And has started giving little Vicktor the world. Rainy Anne started dating Kevin Mosely from down the street. But sadly it didn't seem to work no matter what they tried. Rainy Anne spent so much time with Vicktor and work that her nights and days were filled. And Kevin was kept up in his room all day playing WOW and working all night. Even on their day's off they didn't seem to have enough time for one another. So they moved on.
Ian Rainy's late husband paid a visit afew months ago. Vicktor didn't want to get along with him, or even be near him. So Rainy Anne decided that they should't see each other anymore and that he should go and be with his new 'Trophy Wife'. Now she is trying to provide for her family, and that wont be easy since Vicktor is now in the first grade.
[More to come..Thank's you all for your comments! I really do like it when reader's help contribute to my story...So comment's and some more critisim?]
6th Nov 2007, 11:34 PM
It was around seven am around the Benson household, and Rene was tapping away at the keys of her computer's keyboard. The air was thick around her as her eyes lay upon the growing novel. Her turquoise eye's were bloodshot and screaming for a break from the night long writting frenzy. As Renebegan to get up from her metal chair she heard a familair patter of footie pajama feet against her wood flooring. Turning her gaze towards the three year old she smiled .
"Momma!" wailed the giggle of Devyn's words. "Hungy!!!" she chirped while falling upon the floor forcing her tiny finger's inbetween her lips and saliva trail. Standing up Rene grabbed her little girl and wraped her arm's around her. "Okay sweetie, mommie will get you some food." she whispered as she waddled outside of her bedroom and down the hallway. As soon as her barefeet patted against the tiled kitchen floor Spencer greeted his wife and began making his 'buisness' calls. In other words....Talking to Dawn.
"Is it about the new series Spence?" Rene yelled as she dug deep into the fridge for Devyn's food. Placing it in the three year old's hands Rene waddled over to her husband an hung up the phone. Spencer didn't seem to mad about it because he grabbed his wife in his arm's and began to sway back and forth with her then letting her go. "Rene, you need to talk to your friend. She calls because she need's her story on your STORY." he whinned as he walked back over to the phone. "Oh and I'm supposed to do a million thing's at once? I have a stay at home job, with a bun in the oven, a very...special daughter, and I have to now ward off my own paparatzi?" Rene giggled while making breakfast for her and Spencer.
"Doggie!" squealed Devyn as she looked out the glass door.
7th Nov 2007, 12:00 AM
"Oh my god, Kevin leave my house! You are not supposed to be here anymore!"
"Oh c'mon Rainy! Why not? We're good together, you know that! Even Vicktor know's that! He's the one who callHe'sthe----"
"KEVIN. Don't you ever bring my little Vickie into this. He is none of your concern. He's my son, not yours. Not ours, not your's. MINE. He's my son, and I'll take care of him on MY OWN if I HAVE TO." yelled Rainy Anne after cutting off Kevin's words. Her long curled hair fluttered back and forth as she had her small episode. "And further more if I ever see you around here again I will call the police and obtain a restraining order!"
"C'mon babe you don't mean that. You know we'rethe best match made in heaven. C'mon just let me hold you close, and you'll see." His dorky smile came upon his five o'clock shadow face. Rainy Anne was disgusted at is pitiful attempt to come back into her life. "I gave you the world babe, let me bring it back to---".
"What?" qirked Kevin almost over thrilled with excitement.
"I'll come back to you..." she whispered low and quite. Then looking up at Kevin with her deep chocolate eyes she began to lean in for a kiss.
"Oh my really?" spoke up Kevin.
"NO!" she screamed as she pushed him out the door.
After stomping back into her bedroom she threw erself upon the freshly washed bedlinens, she closed her eyes and breathed calmly in and out. While attempting to regain her own sanity and composure, Rainy Anne could hear the faint voice of her son. Slowly pulling herself up Rainy rubbed her head and began down the hallway. Slowly creeping up to the open door she could see inside his blue room, and could now hear his cries.
"Vickie?" she choked up peering inside from the doorway.
"Hey...hey...It's okay sweetie. Sometime's Mom just looses control of her feelings, and things get way out of hand and she just has to raise her voi---" she stopped in her tracks. To see her son's tear's fall like this over some man Rainy couldn't take it. "Does he make you that happy?" she whispered peering down at her son. His head went back inforth with his brown mophead hair following after it. "Hey how about we just stay home all day sweetie?" she said with enthusiasm. "Yeah, I'll stay home from work, and you stay home from school. We'll watch movies, play games, I'll even teach you how to paint a masterpiece." And with that Vicktor just shook his head and ran out to his school bus and went on his way to school.
"I'll give it one more chance..." she sighed before thinking back to what just happened.
After that silence filled the hole house.
7th Nov 2007, 03:36 AM
*Excuse the necklace in the second to last picture..oh and the poor quallity of afew of them...My sisters computer is such a doofus. Ooooh!! And also feedback is welcome -.-*
Dawn's day's will filled with waking up every morning and taking Cassie to a playmate date at the neighborhood daycare center. When she'd get home she'd find her older sister moaning and tossing in her bed. 'It has been three days...Why wont she tell m what's wrong.' she thought as she walked down the hallway as quitly as she could.
Dawn knew that Max was going out clubing at night, meeting new men and experiencing heartbreak over and over again. Eventhough she loved her neice and Godchild she couldn't help but think that this cherade was getting fairly old and loosing it's heavenly glow. After walking down the wooden planks of her newly waxed stairs she pulled the phone close to her ear's and dialed Rene's number.
"Hey..Spence...It's me again. You know Max's little sister? Yeah, I nee--"
"Dawn please! Rene has no time for her story now that I work and she spends all day with Violet and Devyn Marie. And after last year..she's just been to depressed...."
"Yes, but if you would please tell her to call me back I'd apprieciate that. Okay thank's Spencer...Yeah, you guy's still coming over this weekend? Oh..okay. Talk to you later...bye."
After the phone call Dawn was disappointed but seemed alright. Upstairs sh could hear Maxxine's groans as she crept out of bed. With a sigh in her voice she began to call her mother's house when---WOOOSH.
"I'm going out!" shrieked Maxxine as she ran down the stairs and past her sister. "Oh and I'll pick up Cassie! But you must promise you'll do her present shopping! Love you!" she wailed before jumping in the car and racing off.
Dawn stood there dumbfonded. "Cassie's birthday...was four day's ago...".
7th Nov 2007, 10:35 PM
11th Nov 2007, 11:27 PM
[Uhh, well it's over. :[, hopefully this gave me some practice for the Sequel..No one shows any interest anyways. Uhh, well there will be a second part for their children and that was the main focus anyways...=
12th Nov 2007, 05:19 AM
Why close??? Just because there is no attention just yet give it sometime, the more you update the more attention it will get.
12th Nov 2007, 02:29 PM
i liked it hope your new story is up soon
17th Nov 2007, 03:28 AM
That's not the real problem though... I just got grounded for the rest of the freakin' semester and it's just not worth staying up all night to update. Although the new story will be up soon...Even yet very soon and tht one will update as soon as I will be able to.
17th Nov 2007, 06:13 AM
Aww I was likin this story! :( I just got caught up with it. Well I'm looking forward to your new story! I'm sorry you got grounded. Ugh, I remember those days. I was always grounded. :rolleyes:
22nd Nov 2007, 01:24 AM
Hehe yeah, well Im trying to get ahold of a mod to move the thread to the finished thread. No luck there. :/ All their boxes are always FULL. Dx
Well I sneak on when I can. Mostly on the weekends and such, I'm going to be putting my sister's hard drive into my room, since we moved this past weekend back into my dads. Uggh.
Yeah stormy...I envy you.. XD;; But it's prolly just as hard without the school... :/
I am working on my new story and as soon as I can get ahold of a Mod I WILL BE PUTTING IT UP. But ehh...who can say maybe the teenagers will be more interesting :D And get more comments and ratings. ^^
Oh and also be on the look out for my new story 'Last Temptation' =] It'll be up sometime after the holidays. =]
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